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Too by ~deftoned:icondeftoned:



where are we.
wouldn't have thought we'd meet so soon.
didn't expect to hear those words you said.
i've never felt this way before.

asleep inside the void between.
lucid in a dream, or simply lost within reality.

sinking.
feeling.

resting-
next to you.

the rain falls freely on our frames;
my eyes have lost themselves,
tracing crop circles in the clouds.
these drops, they break away
upon our lips like shattered glass.
my armored heart's been pierced.

softly.
swiftly.

contemplating.
[this can't be happening]

hesitating.
[it is]

i can't keep this inside-
but should i let it out?


breathing.
yielding.
i turn to you and whisper...

...I love you too.
©2006-2008 ~deftoned
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~dying-inside:icondying-inside: Feb 27, 2006, 4:44:13 PM
This is beautifully written, I really like how it flows so naturally. Almost like the reader is in the moment. Very weel done.

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~-poetic-tragedy-:icon-poetic-tragedy-: Mar 1, 2006, 8:08:13 PM
Oh, why did you ever leave DA?
I love the way you write.
My favourite part:

"contemplating.
[this can't be happening]

hesitating.
[it is]"

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~deftoned:icondeftoned: Mar 2, 2006, 2:50:25 AM
i left because i had to go.

but i'm glad you like my solemn work.

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~-poetic-tragedy-:icon-poetic-tragedy-: Mar 2, 2006, 4:45:08 PM
I didn't really mean the question. I knew why.

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